Exercise: Eliminating wordiness and passive voice
1. The bicycle was damaged beyond repair.
2. Although Bradley Hall is regularly populated by students, close study of the building as a structure is seldom undertaken by them.
3. Even though students fill Bradley Hall, they rarely study the building’s structure.
4. She entered the university with high hopes that her discipline’s faculty would fulfill her educational needs.
5. The bus company will expectedly announce the new schedule in a few days.
6. Disobeying safety rules causes trouble.
7. Campus administrators arrested five out of at least a thousand students attending a campus rally for disorderly conduct and charged several others with organizing a public meeting without a permit.
8. The house was built with gray and terra cotta bricks.
9. Students chose only those subjects they believe will benefit them after graduation.
10. Soon, college freshmen must realize the need for contacting their advisors concerning their major choices.
11. The word love does not have a specific meaning since it is a relative term.
Prep assignment on working with sources
Look at your source. In no more than two sentences below, state what you see as the overall argument or point of the article/essay
In their article “Occupational fatalities resulting from falls in the oil and gas extraction industry, United States, 2005–2014,” Mason, Retzer, Hill, and Lincoln argue that companies ought to ensure that their fall protection plans targeting workers that assemble and disassemble drilling rigs are progressive, and effective fall prevention programs are in place to prevent high-rise falls.
Now select the quotations you want to incorporate in your own essay
List those here:
“In 86% of fatal falls in this series

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